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Verb TenseWritten by: Essay Edge As you write your essay, remember to focus on verbs and keep adjectives to a minimum. Pumping your sentences full of adjectives and adverbs is not the same thing as adding detail or color. Adjectives and adverbs add lazy description, but verbs add action. Passive TenseOur editors find that one of the greatest weaknesses of admissions essays is their frequent use of the passive tense. For this mini-lesson you will learn why the passive voice should be avoided, how to identify it, and how to replace it with the preferred active voice.Overuse of the passive voice throughout an essay can make your prose seem flat and uninteresting. Sentences in active voice are also more concise than those in passive voice. You can recognize passive-voice expressions because the verb phrase will always include a form of to be, such as am, is, was, were, are, or been. The presence of a be-verb, however, does not necessarily mean that the sentence is in passive voice. In sentences written in passive voice, the subject receives the action expressed in the verb; the subject is acted upon. In sentences written in active voice, the subject performs the action expressed in the verb; the subject acts. EXAMPLES: (Passive) I was selected to be the tuba player by the band leader. (Active) The bandleader selected me to be the tuba player.
Answers: 1) c; 2) a; 3) a; 4) b; 5) a; 6) a; 7) b; 8) c; 9) a; 10) c; Changing Passive Voice to Active VoiceIf you want to change a passive-voice sentence to active voice, find the agent in the phrase, the person or thing that is performing the action expressed in the verb. Make that agent the subject of the sentence, and change the verb accordingly. For many instances of the passive voice in your essay, you can follow these steps:
Change these sentences from passive voice to active voice, or note if no change should be made. 1. I was taught by my brother the principles of barbecuing. 2. My father was given the title by the former head chief. 3. The house was wrecked by the party and the cat was let loose by the guests. 4. The house is a mess, the cat is lost, and the car has been stolen by Justin. 5. Unfortunately, my plan was ruined by Gerald, the building superintendent. 6. The roof was leaking. It had been leaking all week. 7. The ball was thrown by Lucy, who had been hiding in the bushes. 8. Francesca was placed on the first flight to Boston. Her father put her there. 9. “To be or not to be?” That is the question. 10. A feast had been created from nothing. I was astounded. Answers: 1. My brother taught me the principles of barbecuing. 2. The former head chief gave the title to my father. 3. The party wrecked the house and the guests let the cat loose. 4. The house is a mess, the cat is lost, and Justin has stolen the car. 5. Unfortunately, Gerald, the building superintendent, ruined my plan. 6. No change. 7. Lucy, who had been hiding in the bushes, threw the ball. 8. Francesca’s father placed her on the first flight to Boston. 9. No change. 10. A feast had been created from nothing. This astounded me. EXERCISE #6: PASSIVE-FREE WRITINGWrite a 100-word essay on anything at all (preferably relating to your essay topic) without using any form of the verb “to be.”From ESSAYS THAT WILL GET YOU INTO COLLEGE, by Amy Burnham, Daniel Kaufman, and Chris Dowhan. Copyright 1998 by Dan Kaufman. Reprinted by arrangement with Barron's Educational Series, Inc.
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