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AshesWritten by: gantoris My lips so tainted In the blood they tasted. Created in the mists of time I stand naked in the moonlight, Skin glistening in the moist morning air. Once the king of dragons, Usurper of a thousand nations. A god amongst the mortals, Now it all lies in ashes, Wind blowing the dirt gently away. The world changed, As did I, the world I knew, Is nought but a mirage A fragment of my past, Now I cower from the night. I fear for the ashes may return, And bring forth the final blow, Ashes of crimson and blue, Powers unmatched hide within them Power to run my blood cold. I join the beggars and the homeless, Hiding from the ashes, Hoping for a chance of forgiveness. Can the god Yahweh be so cruel? So merciless on those he loves? Oh I wish to return to the ashes. Became dead again, no longer feel the fear, The wrath of god, Has my god deserted me? And left me in the ashes?
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| shellyshelly 2001-05-20 10:00AM | |
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I'm sorry, I'm feeling quite harsh and critical this evening, but this is so cliche'd and so boring! was this inspired by, like, every sci-fi fantasy ever? it sounds like it. OK, it does seem like the writer can write, it's technically a 'good' poem, but the cheesy subject matter really ruins it. | |
| elektra 2001-09-23 10:00AM | |
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Kinda good...but...seems like a poem written by someone who is much engrossed in the world of fantasy...not that it is wrong, but i am someone who prefers a real life kind of thing.. --------------------- ~There is no worst act than to hate when you dislike being hated.~ | |
| JAZZ 2002-09-15 10:00AM | |
| Correct me if im wrong but im guessing there is more than fantisy and sci-fi in this poem. Using the name Yahweh, kinda pionts to that direction. let me know | |
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